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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied table indicates the
number
 of
tourists
 who traveled
to
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 an international trip in five various
continent
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continents
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 in 1990,1995,2000 and 2005. It can be clearly seen that Europe had the highest
number
 of visitors.
However
,
People
 did not prefer to go to
Middle
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the Middle
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 West in all
years
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the years
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 and It had the
least
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lowest
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 rate of
tourists
 over the period. In 1990,the
number
 of
community
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communities
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 who went to America was 680.5
millions
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million
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.(Which was the highest level of visitors over the whole year).
Following
this
,the
number
 of
people
 who travelled to America was 112.5,118.2 and 113.2
millions
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million
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 in 1995,2000 and 2005,respectively.
Moreover
,280.2
millions
 of
people
 chose to go to Europe in 1990 and
then
 the
tourists
 of Europe rose moderately for the next three years.
In contrast
,
people
 did not tend to travel to
Middle
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the Middle
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 West with 9.8
millions
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million
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 passengers in 1990.(Which was the lowest
number
 of
tourists
 over the period).
Additionally
,11.3,13.5 and 15.8
millions
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million
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 visitors went to Middle West in 1995,2000 and 2005,respectively.
In addition
,Africa was the next destination with the least passengers with 18.2
millions
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million
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 in 1990.
While
,
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apply
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presicely
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precisely
 28.7
millions
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million
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 of the
tourists
preferd
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prefer
preferred
 to go to Africa in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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