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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The provided diagram illustrates the average temperature per month and average sunshine time throughout one calendar year in
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, what stands out from the gathered data is that weather condition in
London
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 and New
York
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 is strongly correlated
while
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Sydney
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 experienced a vice versa fluctuation.
However
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, sunshine hours in
London
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 were the lowest compared to almost the same amount in competitors. Between January and March, temperatures in New
York
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 were the coolest, with numbers steadily increasing from 4 to 12.
Although
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London
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 figures were slightly higher during the first three months, they continued noticeably at lower levels from April to November, having the highest number at around 23 degrees Celsius. New
York
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 tremendously reached the level of 30 in July and significantly decreased to 5 in December.
Sydney
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 city had a hot season in January, starting at 27 degrees Celsius which plateaued one more month.
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, the statistics considerably declined to 15 in July and moderately climbed to 24 and 25 in November and December respectively.
While
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London
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's sunbath hours were 1180, New
York
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's and
Sydney
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's represented 2535 and 2473 hours in turn.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • temperature fluctuations
  • range
  • significant differences
  • average number of hours of sunshine per year
  • highlight
  • relate
  • patterns
  • comparisons
  • major cities
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