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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some
people
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 believe that few
people
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 are born with natural talents for activities, like sports and music,
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 others claim that they can be taught to excel in
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skills
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 talent is passed down through genes, I believe that hard work and discipline in learning a particular skill would allow
anyone
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 to be an expert in it. On the one hand, it is true that
people
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 are born with certain capabilities without learning
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 because of their genes.
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 to say that they are gifted to play sports or learn to sing without putting much effort
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 educating themselves about it. They may have inherited these talents from their parents or
anyone
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 with these set
skills
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 from their family tree.
A genetic
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 research done in 2022 on 150 individuals proved the existence of
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 of genetics on talent.
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,
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 does not mean that the
people
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 who did not inherit talent cannot learn to master those
skills
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.
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, routinely working hard with determination can make a person good at what they do.
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, Ed Sheeran, during his teenage, was a terrible
sing
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singer
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 but now, he is one of the best singers in the world. In many of his
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 he
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 that his perseverance
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his
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 to the path of success in the field of music.
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, like him,
anyone
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 can work and strive to be an expert. In conclusion, genetic inheritance can make it easy for some individuals to be talented. Having said that,
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 my view,
anyone
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 can achieve
skills
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 if they are consistent in
practicing
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 and working hard in any field of choice.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs for better flow and coherence.
task achievement
You have provided a clear and balanced discussion of both viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in maintaining a logical structure.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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