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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The chart below illustrates different
datas
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data
 about the underground rail networks in six large cities.
It is clear that
in
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London, Paris and Tokyo which are
oldest
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 cities see the highest number of
traveller
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travellers
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with
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over
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 larger
distance
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distances
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. In detail, London is the oldest city which opened in 1863 and
also
have
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 the
larger
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largest
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 number of
kilometres
 of route with 775 passengers per year.
In addition
, the second oldest city with 199
kilimetres
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kilimetre
 route is Paris
that
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 was opened in 1900 with 1191
millions traveller
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million travellers
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.
However
, Los Angeles
is
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 the newest system
which
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the underground railway was opened in 2001 with the smallest route only 28
kilometres
that
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and
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have
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has
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 50
millions
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million
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passengers per year. The number of travellers in Tokyo which was opened in 1927 with 155
kilometres
 distance is 1927
millions
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million
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 per year.
Whereas
, Kyoto only have 45
millions
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 passengers with only 11
kilometres
way
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away
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that
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was opened in 1981.
Also
, Washington DC is another city which assigns 144
millions
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million
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 commuters with 126
kilometrs
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kilometres
kilometre
 road that was opened in 1976.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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