You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he /she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: - Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. - Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. - Suggest types of jobs that would be suitable for him/her.
Dear John,
Hope you're doing fine. I'm writing
this
letter to you to share my opinion whether
to go to Change preposition
on whether
college
or to try to get a job
. My suggestion to you would be get
a Fix the infinitive
to get
job
at the moment rather than joining
a Wrong verb form
join
collegeto
do your Masters in Logistics & Supply chain Management.
Correct your spelling
college to
Firstly
, you would not enjoy going to college
now especially considering your age. Most students who would be along with
you are going to be much younger and will treat like
a senior citizen and maybe even Correct pronoun usage
you like
reluctant
to be friends with you.
Without any Add a missing verb
be reluctant
job
experience
you would not be able to understand most of the topics discussed in the class. Attending a Add a comma
experience,
Masters
course in Logistics & Supply Chain will Change noun form
Masters's
Master's
be
Verb problem
help me
along with
other professionals who would be having
good experience in the same field. Wrong verb form
have
Moreover
, by getting a job
first you have the opportunity to make some money before you join college
without depending on your parents for any funds.
I would suggest you get a job
in the same field you're planning to do the course, so maybe start of
as Change preposition
off
Correct article usage
a Logsitcs
Logsitcs
coordinator, Supply chain specialist or Correct your spelling
Logistics
excutive
. Correct your spelling
executive
This
will help you get a better experience within the industry and help you get a better understanding when topics are discussed in the
class when Correct article usage
apply
join
a Change the verb form
joining
college
.
Hope my advise
helps and please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any more questions.
Best Regards,
Vipin AbrahamReplace the word
advice
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Grammar and Spelling
Try to proofread your writing to correct minor errors like missing spaces ('collegeto' should be 'college to') and typos ('Logsitcs' should be 'Logistics').
Task Achievement
Consider elaborating more on why job experience would make understanding class topics easier. This can strengthen your argument.
Structure
The letter has a clear structure with a greeting, body paragraphs addressing the main points, and a closing.
Task Achievement
You provided specific reasons for your advice, which makes your argument convincing.
Tone
The tone is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite