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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
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The diagram illustrates the process of
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noodles
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 manufacture.
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,
it is clear that
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 there are 8 steps in the production of
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noodles
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. Beginning with storage silos of flour, and ending with labelling. Looking at the picture in more detail, we can see that at the first step of the production of
instant
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noodles
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, flour is filled into storage silos by a truck. The flour is
then
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 blended in a mixer with water and oil. After mixing, the resulting mixture is put in dough sheets to form rollers which are
then
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 yielded into
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 strings by a bough strip system. The
noodle
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 strings are continually moved to moulds to form
noodle
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 discs which are cooked with oil before being dried, and
instant
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noodles
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 are produced.
Subsequently
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,
instant
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noodles
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 are packaged in cup containers with vegetables and spices,
finally
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, these
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noodle
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 cups are labelled and sealed to be ready for selling.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, noodles, noodle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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