The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria as the staff is not using it much. You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director: - Give reasons of low usage - How will it affect the staff - Suggest ways to improve it

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Dear Sir, I am Lovish Kakkar. I am currently employed in the Accounting and Finance Department of your esteemed organisation. I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention to a recent decision of our management to close the
cafeteria
. My colleagues and I do not agree with
this
development and would like you to reconsider it. To give more details, there are a few reasons why the
cafeteria
has been used less.
To begin
with, there is a problem of cleanliness in the
premise
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because it is not cleaned regularly. Apart from that, the coffee machine has not been working for almost two months now.
Lastly
, the microwave and dishwasher are prone to damage and only work irregularly.
Due to
all these reasons, very less people use the
cafeteria
. The decision to close it will adversely affect the rest of us who regularly use it to have lunch. Some employees like me, who do not own a car will have no place to go to have our food.
Moreover
, the
cafeteria
is the only place where we can meet and talk comfortably with our co-workers. To give my humble opinion,
instead
of closing the lunch room, we shall work to improve it. If the management can ensure cleanliness and install new electronic appliances in the
cafeteria
, attendance will increase surely. I hope for a careful consideration of our request. Yours faithfully, Lovish
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Ensure to include all the necessary contact information for a formal letter.
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Try to provide more specific suggestions for improvement, such as names of appliances or detailed cleanliness routines.
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Consider breaking down large paragraphs into smaller ones for better readability.
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The letter maintains a respectful and formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for addressing the director.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, with clear introduction, body and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a single point clearly and effectively, improving readability.
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