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The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000.

The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000.
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The line graph demonstrates the literacy rates of three different continents from 1930 to 2000. The continents represented are North
America
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, Asia, and Africa. One notable observation is that North
America
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 remained high throughout the
period
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. At the beginning of the time
period
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, its literacy
rate
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 was almost 70% and marked 80% in 2000. Even though
this
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 didn’t experience any big changes over the course of the time
period
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, it showed always the highest record among continents. It is
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 noteworthy that the figure of Asia absolutely surged during
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period
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. In 1930, its
rate
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 comprised
nearly
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almost 40%, but surpassed 80% after 70 years, which became almost the same percentage
to
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 North
America
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 in 2000.
In contrast
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, Africa has had the lowest
rate
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 during
this
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 time. In 1930, its figure was only about 15% and just increased to 30% in 2000.
This
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 continent showed even the growing
rate
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 between 1940 and 1950 but was generally stagnant into 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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 Asia’s literacy
rate
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 skyrocketed from 1930 to 2000 and North
America
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 showed always the highest percentage of it.
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, Africa exclusively experienced stable growth throughout the whole
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, period, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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