The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
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the number
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not their original homeland between the period 2002 and 2007
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overall
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Overall
numbers
between the three countries differ while
numbers
go up in a specific region the numbers
go down in the other
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if
people studying abroad in 2003 where Correct your spelling
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numbers
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down from 30000 to roughly 21000 by the year 2007
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and Australia had a small fluctuation in the Correct your spelling
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numbers
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the numbers
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dropped to about 45000 in 2004 Correct your spelling
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numbers
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the Correct your spelling
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numbers
go back to 50000 while
in Australia the numbers
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