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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
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 of students that study in a country
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 not their original homeland between the period 2002 and 2007
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overall
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, the
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 between the three countries differ
while
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numbers
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 go up in a specific region the
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 go down in the other as shown the
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 had a significant
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decline
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difference
 in the amount
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if
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 people studying abroad in 2003 where
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 down from 30000 to roughly 21000 by the year 2007 as we can see both
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USA
 and Australia had a small fluctuation in the
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,
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 the
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USA
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 dropped to about 45000 in 2004
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Australia
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had a smaller drop
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numbers
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 the same year which makes it about 9000
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, both have seen a rise afterwards where in the
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USA
 the
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 go back to 50000
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 in Australia the
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 increased to 10000 and went steady afterwards
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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