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The table below shows the population (in millions)of 8 countries in 2008 and 2018 . It also shows the percentage growth in population between these two dates

The table below shows the population (in millions)of 8 countries in 2008 and 2018 . It also shows the percentage growth in population between these two dates
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The table given compares the
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number of
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population
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 in 8 different countries including the percentage
growth
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 between two
years
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 in 2008 and 2018.
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, it can be seen that Brazil was the most populated country in the first period studied.
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, it was Angola which had the biggest
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number of
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population
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growth
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 throughout the
years
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given
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despite the fact that the
number
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 of its
population
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still
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 lower than Nigeria as the second biggest
population
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growth
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 producer. Regarding the country with the highest
number
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 of people, Brazil started at 194
million
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 in 2008 and 208
million
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 in 2018, for the span of 10
years
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 it
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only produced 7% of
population
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growth
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. Compared with Nigeria and Pakistan
that
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stood at 128
million
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 and 173
million
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 in 2008 respectively, and
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28%
for
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 Nigeria and 21%
for
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 Pakistan
and
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contributed almost the same
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number of
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population
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 as Brazil in 2018. Despite the biggest
growth
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number
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, Angola still had a lower
number
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 of people
by
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 only 9 births
occurred
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as well as
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 Canada with only 4 babies
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born. In terms of depopulation, Russia had no record of birth and stayed at 143
million
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 people in 10
years
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.
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, Japan and Romania saw a slight decrease in their
population
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 from 128
million
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 to 126
million
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 for Japan, and 20
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 to 19
million
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 for Romania.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, population, growth, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • standout statistics
  • magnitude of change
  • economic expansion
  • improved healthcare
  • aging population
  • emigration
  • regional patterns
  • anomalies
  • infrastructure
  • governance
  • global demographics
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