The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The graph illustrates how many shops were closed and opened in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it is evident that
while
both figures experienced dramatic changes, they dwindled significantly in numbers. Looking at the three years, openings led
at
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more than 8000 in 2011, prior to their dramatic downfall to roughly 4000 in 2012.
However
, it rose to more than 6000 in the year 2014
where
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it met the
closures'
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rate.
On the contrary
, the number of shops that were closed started at more than 6000 in the first year, experienced
a subsequent fluctuations
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subsequent fluctuations
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between 6000 and 7000
,
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and
finally
reached 6000 in 2014. Regarding the
last
four years, the capture for closings plummeted to less than 1000 in 2015 before its considerable surge to over 5000. Meanwhile,
that
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of
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openings saw a slight decline to 4000, where it remained unchanged
untill
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until
2017, when it witnessed a
further
discrement
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increment
decrement
to 3000, outrunning the closure numbers. In terms of the
last
year, 2018, the capture for openings and closures were 3000 and just above 5000 respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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