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some think newspapers are the best way for reading the news while others think other media is better

#think #newspapers #news #media
Nowadays there is a debate about
best
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way
for reading
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to read
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news
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. a group of people assume that
newspaper
 is
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way
 better in comparison with social
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networks
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 meanwhile media is considered to be
easiest
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way
 to read something new.
This
 essay will discuss both opinions And explain why
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 find myself using the media to
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access
acces
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access
news
 On the one hand, having
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access
with
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 new detailed
informations
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information
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through modern devices is thought
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a
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 possible fastest
way
. In
this
 modern
world
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 we do not Have to no longer wait for a piece of
news
 for a long Time. Just we Should turn
internet
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can
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know what is happening in the whole world. Some think we no longer need physical newspapers because in
technological
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 era we can read
news
 on
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relaible
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reliable
 websites
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it is believed that it is eco-friendly And does not waste
paper
 for publishing
paper
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newspapers
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.
Thus
 it can affect positevely to the environmental
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 by avoiding cutting trees .
On the other hand
.
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 newspapers need to be
only
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way
 to read
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news
 because it is a conservative And more
convinient
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convenient
 method.
Thus
 it is
preffered
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preferred
 by
old
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the older
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 generation because many of them suppose that reading
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 in the park is more entertaining compared to watching
news
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the news
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 on the internet. the people who find it as
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entertainment do not replace
newspaper
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newspapers
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 with
the
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multimedia.
Moreover
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There is a group who work in a post office
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 with
online
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the online
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 version of newspapers because of unemployment.
To conclude
, as
i
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 mentioned above there are some advantages that can be brought by
news
 which was shown on media and
prefferable
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preferable
preferably
 sites of
news
 on the
paper
.
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You have made an effort to discuss both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced understanding of the topic.
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You have acknowledged the role of the environment by mentioning the eco-friendly impact of not using paper, which adds a thoughtful dimension to your essay.

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