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The charts below give information about different types of waste disposed of in one country in 1960 and 2011.

The charts below give information about different types of waste disposed of in one country in 1960 and 2011.
The pie charts provide data on the various types of misuse disposal in one country in 1960 and 2011.
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, in 1960 and 2011, the largest categories were
Food
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 and Paper,
while
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 Wood and Other sections held the smallest
waste
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 of
disposal
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. The biggest
waste
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 disposals in 1960 were Paper, Textiles, Other and
Food
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, with 25%, 17% and 12%, respectively.
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, whilst
Food
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 increased its share to almost half.Paper saw a notable decrease to 15 per
cent
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. Despite a minor decrease of 10 % to 15 per
cent
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 in 2011.
Food
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 replaced Textiles as the highest
waste
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 disposal in 2011.
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 Other figures decreased slightly from 12 to 4 per
cent
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 in 1960 and 2011. The remaining five competitors had around a tenth of the total in 1960 each.
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, the Wood increased by 4% in 2011 compared to 1960 and was 8%. The five smallest trends, the percentage of Green
waste
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, Metal, Glass unchanged, they stood at 9%, 9%, 5% per
cent
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 in 1960 and 2011.Plastic went from the smallest share in 1960 to the second largest in 2011, achieving a percentage of 18.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, waste, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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