The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart presents a comparison data of weekly income divided into 8 categories. Generally,
people
in 1968 had spent higher than in 2018 on primary necessities
such
as
:
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food, clothing and footwear, personal
goods
, and fuel and power.
On the contrary
, in 2018,
people
tended to spend their money more on leisure activities, housing, and transportation.
Nevertheless
, household
goods
outcomes were exactly the same both in 1968 and 2018. In the year
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1968, nourishment had been the most household consumption to pay which recorded 35% of their weekly earnings. Surprisingly,
people
in 2018 only spent 17% of their wages to buy food, it had almost a half percentage of degradation. Apparel’s reduction
also
has experienced the same constraint.
People
lack
of
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interest
to buy
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clothes or shoes which showed a depreciation from 10% to 5% in 50 years.
Although
personal
goods
had only taken 8% of family wages in 1968, it
also
has been facing derivation to 4% in 2018. Fuel and power have slightly deflated from 7% to 4% over 50 years. Vacation has been the ultimate cost of
people
in 2018, which significantly had been increasing from less than 10% to 22% within the 50-year length of time. Housing payments had
also
been facing 9% inflation. The
last
, transportation
also
had an ascension from 8% to 14% of income.
However
, household
goods
had surprisingly recorded the same percentage over 50 years, which recorded 8% of family weekly earnings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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