Some people think that traveling abroad is an important experience for youngsters. Others think that involves too much time and expenses. Discuss both perspectives And give your opinion.

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Some believe that traveling around the
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from a young
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is an important experience,
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others claim, it needs much
money
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and
time
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. Travelling gives an opportunity for youngsters to learn about cultural diversity from an earlier
age
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, but the
process
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itself is
time
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-consuming and much more expensive.
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, I believe, those who can afford to
travel
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and manage their
time
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accordingly
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should
travel
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in their childhood. It is said that
children
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gain much experience by travelling abroad.
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is because it gives the ability to learn about different cultures around the
world
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from a younger
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.
Children
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are much keen on learning than adults and they love to explore and gain knowledge about various nations. Visiting many countries gives them the ability to know about each country's rituals, religions and cultures.
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, it is a known fact that
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who have seen and understood
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cultural differences around the
world
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from a younger
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are more likely to respect other religions and cultures equally. Some believe travelling involves much
time
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and
money
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.
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is because the
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of travelling including visa application, air ticket booking,
accommodation
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time
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time
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-consuming
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very expensive. As many parents focus on their
children
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's education and make future plans regarding it, in most scenarios they are unable to afford these travelling charges.
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, these operations sometimes take months to complete.
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travelling itself is
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and
money
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-consuming.
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, the Visa
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alone requires a huge amount of
money
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and sometimes takes months to be approved. My opinion is that if any parent is able to provide their child
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travel
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abroad, they should do it as it will give an opportunity for the child to gain memorable experiences. Some parents have the ability to cover their
children
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's expenses much more easily and allow them to
travel
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without any
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. Since they don't lack
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, it
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helps them to speed up the travelling
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by paying extra.
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, by paying a couple of hundred more, many can speed up the visa
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in many countries. In conclusion, Some state travelling around the
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at
younger
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age
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gives much more experience
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others claim it to be much more expensive and
time
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-consuming. I believe, even though it takes some amount of
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and
time
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,
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if parents are able to provide and cover the expenses, they should allow their
children
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to
travel
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abroad.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses both perspectives on the topic and provides a clear opinion. However, ensure each point is elaborated with relevant examples, especially in the second body paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Structuring your paragraphs with clear topic sentences and logically flowing ideas will enhance clarity. Try to ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
introduction conclusion present
You have provided a clear and relevant introduction that frames the essay nicely, and you've restated your opinion in the conclusion.
complete response
You have tackled all parts of the question and have maintained a balanced discussion, presenting both perspectives before giving your opinion.

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