Some people think that traveling abroad is an important experience for youngsters. Others think that involves too much time and expenses. Discuss both perspectives And give your opinion.

Some believe that traveling around the
world
from a young
age
is an important experience,
while
others claim, it needs much
money
and
time
. Travelling gives an opportunity for youngsters to learn about cultural diversity from an earlier
age
, but the
process
itself is
time
-consuming and much more expensive.
Therefore
, I believe, those who can afford to
travel
and manage their
time
accordingly
should
travel
in their childhood. It is said that
children
gain much experience by travelling abroad.
This
is because it gives the ability to learn about different cultures around the
world
from a younger
age
.
Children
are much keen on learning than adults and they love to explore and gain knowledge about various nations. Visiting many countries gives them the ability to know about each country's rituals, religions and cultures.
For example
, it is a known fact that
children
who have seen and understood
the
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cultural differences around the
world
from a younger
age
are more likely to respect other religions and cultures equally. Some believe travelling involves much
time
and
money
.
This
is because the
process
of travelling including visa application, air ticket booking,
accommodation
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time
time
-consuming
as well as
very expensive. As many parents focus on their
children
's education and make future plans regarding it, in most scenarios they are unable to afford these travelling charges.
Moreover
, these operations sometimes take months to complete.
Also
travelling itself is
time
and
money
-consuming.
For instance
, the Visa
process
alone requires a huge amount of
money
and sometimes takes months to be approved. My opinion is that if any parent is able to provide their child
to
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travel
abroad, they should do it as it will give an opportunity for the child to gain memorable experiences. Some parents have the ability to cover their
children
's expenses much more easily and allow them to
travel
without any
issue
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. Since they don't lack
money
, it
also
helps them to speed up the travelling
process
by paying extra.
For example
, by paying a couple of hundred more, many can speed up the visa
process
in many countries. In conclusion, Some state travelling around the
world
at
younger
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age
gives much more experience
while
others claim it to be much more expensive and
time
-consuming. I believe, even though it takes some amount of
money
and
time
,
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if parents are able to provide and cover the expenses, they should allow their
children
to
travel
abroad.
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Your essay addresses both perspectives on the topic and provides a clear opinion. However, ensure each point is elaborated with relevant examples, especially in the second body paragraph.
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