The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
The provided chart gives data on how many people remain in different European countries during 2011.
A total of 3298,000 citizens from 5 nations decided to move abroad.
Furthermore
, the majority of them chose to live in Germany. Linking Words
In addition
, almost 50% of those who live in Germany, are Italians but less than 10% are from England.
Apparently, England is considered another popular choice among Germans, Italians, and Spanish but more demanded by Polish. It is clearly seen that 50% of the outlanders come from Poland. Linking Words
However
, British people will prefer to live in Spain, which is a warm province, Linking Words
instead
of choosing the cold weather where they come from.
Surprisingly, the Spanish population established in a foreign country is the minority. Linking Words
Nevertheless
, more than half Linking Words
percent
of those who moved have chosen Germany as their home.
Change the spelling
per cent
In addition
, as a trend, it is highlighted Polish community immigrates more in comparison with the Spanish population that do less.
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To conclude
, it can be deduced that the warm weather in Spain, makes it more attractive for other nationalities to settle down there.Linking Words
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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