The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

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The provided chart gives data on how many people remain in different European countries during 2011. A total of 3298,000 citizens from 5 nations decided to move abroad.

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, the majority of them chose to live in Germany.

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, almost 50% of those who live in Germany, are Italians but less than 10% are from England. Apparently, England is considered another popular choice among Germans, Italians, and Spanish but more demanded by Polish. It is clearly seen that 50% of the outlanders come from Poland.

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, British people will prefer to live in Spain, which is a warm province,

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of choosing the cold weather where they come from. Surprisingly, the Spanish population established in a foreign country is the minority.

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of those who moved have chosen Germany as their home.

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, as a trend, it is highlighted Polish community immigrates more in comparison with the Spanish population that do less.

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, it can be deduced that the warm weather in Spain, makes it more attractive for other nationalities to settle down there.

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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible sollutions?

In some parts of the world tradition festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problem is this causing and what measures could be taken to counter this situation?

Today more and more people want things instantly (e.g: goods, services, news). Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

Ambition is a positive quality for people to have in society today. How important is it for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?