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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, - Explain why you changed jobs. - Describe your new job. - Tell him / her your other news.

#work #company #friend #jobs #job #news
Hi Steve, Hope you're doing well.
I'very m
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I'm
 writing
this
 letter to inform you that I
finally
 started my work at Chaloub Group. Seriously,
its
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 been very long since I'
ve
 been working for EVCARGO Global Forwarding LLC,
bascally
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basically
 almost 10 years.
Moreover
, I'
ve
 been planning to move out
since
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 a long time as I'
ve
 been in the Freight Forwarding industry for more than 14 years now. I was always looking forward to
work
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 for a principal company and
handle
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 their logistics and supply chain. As you must be aware
that
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Chaloub Group deals mainly with luxury products and I am responsible
to handle
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 their complete logistics. I'
ve
 joined here as a Logistics manager and have around 20
staffs
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 reporting to me from the Operations and Customer service teams. Apart from that, by God's
grace
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 everything is well. I'm planning to get married soon, hopefully in a few
months
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 time as we'
ve
 not decided
the
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 dates yet since getting my leave approved
from
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 my new company is not going to be easy.
Anyways
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 will keep you posted on the dates and
expecting
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 you to attend the wedding. Regards, Vipin Abraham
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single idea per paragraph
Improve paragraphing by ensuring each paragraph has a single main idea.
complete response
Check for minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'I'very' and 'bascally'. Make sure every sentence is clear and accurate.
logical structure
Consider using more linking words to improve the logical structure of your letter.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are warm and appropriate for the context.
complete response
The letter successfully addresses all parts of the task prompt.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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