In spite of advances make in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?
Despite much progress made in agriculture, many people suffer from hunger problems.
This
is because the supply-demand of the world
is not enough due to
the increasing world
population
. To resolve this
issue
, we have to extend our food
sources
and find a solution for the rate of growth in the world
population
.
To start with, finding food
sources
is crucial for agriculture to provide efficient and sufficient food
. Because of urbanization, our resources, such
as countryside areas have been destroyed. Therefore
, we have to protect our food
sources
and be aware of the disturbing effects of urbanization, which cause demolishing of prosperous craps that can be used for the food
industry by establishing factories or apartments. The government
may be a solution to restrict the rate of construction made in rural areas. For instance
, In the Netherlands, almost every agricultural area has been protected by authority. The government
advocates and implements its policies properly. Thus
, a strong position of government
can help us to resolve this
issue
.
Besides
that, the increasing population
causes tonnes of issues, and the hunger problem is one of them. The demand for food
rises when the population
grows. This
is an essential issue
for our future because recent research demonstrates that in 2050, the world
population
will be around 10 billion or even more. We must control the population
under a certain limit. For example
, the Chinese government
allows only one child for Chinese families. Regarding that matter, this
way would be a convenient solution for controlling the population
.
In conclusion, the achievements in the agricultural industry are not enough to fix hunger problems. Preserving our food
sources
by certain policies plays a critical role. Likewise
, some policies for controlling population
growth also
have a significant impact on this
issue
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Try to include a more explicit thesis statement at the end of the introduction that clearly outlines the main points of the essay. This will help the reader to anticipate the structure and flow of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your arguments are logically structured and clearly connected. Use more transition words to enhance the flow between paragraphs and ideas.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitions such as 'this issue' too frequently. Instead, use synonyms or rephrase the sentences to keep the writing dynamic and engaging.
task achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the question effectively, discussing both the causes of hunger and possible solutions.
task achievement
Clear and comprehensive ideas are presented, and relevant, specific examples are provided to support the main points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and properly set the stage for and summarize the argument.
coherence cohesion
Main points are generally well-supported with examples and explanations.
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