In an increasingly globalized world, communicating in English is becoming an essential skill. Some people argue that it should become an official language in Vietnam. This means English would be used in government, legal documents, education, and other official communications. The government of Vietnam should make English an official language. Do you agree or disagree? Write a persuasive essay in around 400 words.

Whilst many think that
English
should be an official language of
Vietnam
, I believe that Vietnamese is the best choice because of its
convenient
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in communication. On the one hand,
due to
an
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increasing globalization, it is easy to understand that
English
can help us to catch up with the world,
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becoming
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a global citizens
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global citizens
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. One clear example,
all
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the published
researchs
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research
,
reports
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and reports
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from some
non-gorvernment
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non-government
organizations or international
coucils
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councils
are written in
English
. If we use
English
as our official way of communication, not only in
Vietnam
but
also
in other non-
English
speaking countries, it will be much
more
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easier for us to access
those
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lastest
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latest
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informations
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,
in
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turn, NGOs could fully deliver their
announments
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announcements
.
On the other hand
,
English
is not an easy language to learn. It could be easy for the young, but it
harder
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for those previous generations, which accounts for a huge percentage of people in
Vietnam
and in the world. I believe that
this
will lead to other considerable problems,
such
as
generation
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the generation
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gap.
For instance
, the misunderstanding in the communication between parents and their children, or even between
high-experienced
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professors and learners. As
the
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results
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, both will fail to receive the
informations
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information
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and tasks can not
completely
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done. In conclusion, we all see the
advatages
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advantages
and the
disavatages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
of using
English
as an official language. But I personally trust that the
goverment
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government
of
Vietnam
can handle those problems and accept Vietnamese as a part of our unique
cultures
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.
Submitted by Andy on

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Improve the introduction by clearly stating your position and briefly mentioning the main points you will discuss.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph centers on a single main idea and fully develops it with clear examples and explanations.
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Revise for grammatical accuracy and vocabulary usage to convey your points more precisely.
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Good understanding of the topic and clear stance against making English an official language in Vietnam.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure with distinct paragraphs outlining both viewpoints before concluding with your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Effective use of transition phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to delineate arguments.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • despite

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