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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The chart given illustrates data on international student enrolments. The graph relates 5 countries at three universities.
Overall
, the number of
cases
 in
India
 was higher in the University of Riverview than the total of
cases
 in Colombia.
According to
 the graph,it is noticeable that there is development. It can be clearly seen that the international student. The initial consider that there was a significant rise to approximately 7300 students in
India
 at the University of Riverview.
Then
, the statistics of education students dropped significantly in Colombia.
On the other hand
, there was a high of around 6000 in
India
 of student.
Moreover
,the number of
cases
 fell slightly in Nepal about 3999 admissions at Smithtown educational institution.
In addition
, there was a slow number of students in
India
 around 4999 for
academy
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the academy
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.
Thus
, the figure decreased significantly at Earlwood
academy
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 to around 900. Regarding the given data, it is remarkable that there is a leap. The total of
cases
 in Colombia was less than the
Universities
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 of
Riverview
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Riverview's
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 sum of
cases
 in
India
. In reference to the represented figures, it is significant that there is an achievement.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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