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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
number
 of
people
 who moved from the
contryside
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countryside
 to the city in Iran, Indonesia and Russia
from
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in
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 2000 and gives a prediction for 2025.
Number
 of
people
 is expressed in
millions
.
Overall
, the
number
 of
people
 moving to the city increased in every country and is expected to rise,
exept
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except
 for Indonesia. The
number
 of Iranians leaving the rural areas had a small increase in the first five years, reaching 10
millions
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million
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od
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of
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people
 and
then
 rose significantly until 2020,
where
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when
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 80
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people
 moved to the city. The
number
 of
people
 is predicted to rise in the next years.
Furthermore
, 10
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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indonesians
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Indonesians
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 moved in 2000 and the
number
 reached 20
millions
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million
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 in 2020. The
number
 is expected to remain the same in 2025. Russia increased the
number
 of
people
until
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to
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 80
millions
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million
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 in 2020 and the
number
 is expected to rise by 5 million more in 2025.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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