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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given bar chart represents the results of a survey about the purchases and drinking habits of
coffee
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 and tea found in five major
cities
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 in Australia indicated as a percentage.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that on average the majority of
aussies
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Aussies
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 went to a café for either
coffee
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 or tea,
while
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 that of those who bought a fresh
coffee
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are
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were
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 the least in the
last
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 4 weeks.
However
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, it is interesting to note that only those who lived in Adelaide
seems
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seem
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 to
preferred
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prefer
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 instant
coffee
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 slightly more than fresh
one
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ones
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.
To begin
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 with, more than 55% of the residents in
australia
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Australia
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 went to a café at least once
in
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apply
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this
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 month, except in Adelaide that less than 50%. It is obvious that Major
cities
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 like Melbourne
and
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apply
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Sydney and Hobart ranked as
top
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the top
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 three
cities
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that
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where
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it
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apply
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residents visited a cafe at above 60%.
However
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, trends of those who purchased instant
coffee
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 in every
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cities
Change to a singular noun
city
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ranging
Wrong verb form
range
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 from 45-55%. In regards
with
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to
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,
Australia
Correct your spelling
Australian
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 residents seem to be less favour in
fresh
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of fresh
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coffee
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 at a percentage of lower than 45%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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