The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The given bar chart represents the results of a survey about the purchases and drinking habits of
coffee
and tea found in five major cities
in Australia indicated as a percentage.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that on average the majority of aussies
went to a café for either Change the capitalization
Aussies
coffee
or tea, while
that of those who bought a fresh coffee
are
the least in the Wrong verb form
were
last
4 weeks. However
, it is interesting to note that only those who lived in Adelaide seems
to Correct subject-verb agreement
seem
preferred
instant Wrong verb form
prefer
coffee
slightly more than fresh one
.
Correct pronoun usage
ones
To begin
with, more than 55% of the residents in australia
went to a café at least once Change the capitalization
Australia
in
Change preposition
apply
this
month, except in Adelaide that less than 50%. It is obvious that Major cities
like Melbourne and
Sydney and Hobart ranked as Correct word choice
apply
top
three Correct article usage
the top
cities
that
Correct word choice
where
it
residents visited a cafe at above 60%. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, trends of those who purchased instant coffee
in every cities
Change to a singular noun
city
ranging
from 45-55%.
In regards Wrong verb form
range
with
, Change preposition
to
Australia
residents seem to be less favour in Correct your spelling
Australian
fresh
Change preposition
of fresh
coffee
at a percentage of lower than 45%.Submitted by kamonluck1999 on
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