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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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depicts
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 variation in the international student enrolment
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Smithtown
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University
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,
University
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 of
Riverview
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, and
Earlwood
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University
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,
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, we can see four different countries ( India, Nepal, Vietnam, Indonesia, and Colombia ).
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 from 0 to 8000
students
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. At first glance, India had the most international
students
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enrolments
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 with 7500 in
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University
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the University
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 of
Riverview
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,
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, Nepal had around 5000
students
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enrolments
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 in
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University
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the University
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 of
Riverview
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,
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, Vietnam had 3500
students
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Enrolments
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in
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University
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the University
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 of
Riverview
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,
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, Indonesia and Colombia
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 the same amount of
students
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enrolments
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 in
University
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 of
Riverview
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 appromexilty 1000
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. In more detail, there
is
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 7500
students
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 from India
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University
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the University
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 of
Riverview
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, 6000
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in
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Smithtown
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University
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, and 5000 Indian
students
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in
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Earlwood
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University
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,
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, There
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 5000
enrolments
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students
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in
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University
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the University
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 of
Riverview
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 and
Smithtown
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University
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 and
Earlwood
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University
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 had the same amount Nepalian
students
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enrolments
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,
in Addition
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,
University
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 of
Riverview
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 had 3500
enrolments
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 Nepalian
students
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 with a slightly fewer
students
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 in
Earlwood
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University
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 with 3000
enrolments
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students
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 and
Smithtown
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University
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 had 2000
students
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,
on the other hand
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, we can see Indonesia and Colombia had the lowest
enrolments
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students
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 in the three Universities.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words smithtown, university, riverview, earlwood, students, enrolments with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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