The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
This
bar
charts
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depicts
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variation in the international student enrolment
in
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Smithtown
University
,
University
of
Riverview
, and
Earlwood
University
,
Furthermore
, we can see four different countries ( India, Nepal, Vietnam, Indonesia, and Colombia ).
in
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addition, in
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from 0 to 8000
students
. At first glance, India had the most international
students
enrolments
with 7500 in
University
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the University
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of
Riverview
,
Furthermore
, Nepal had around 5000
students
enrolments
in
University
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the University
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of
Riverview
,
In addition
, Vietnam had 3500
students
Enrolments
in
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University
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the University
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of
Riverview
,
However
, Indonesia and Colombia
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the same amount of
students
enrolments
in
University
of
Riverview
appromexilty 1000
students
. In more detail, there
is
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7500
students
from India
in
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University
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the University
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of
Riverview
, 6000
students
in
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Smithtown
University
, and 5000 Indian
students
in
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Earlwood
University
,
Furthermore
, There
is
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5000
enrolments
students
in
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University
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the University
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of
Riverview
and
Smithtown
University
and
Earlwood
University
had the same amount Nepalian
students
enrolments
,
in Addition
,
University
of
Riverview
had 3500
enrolments
Nepalian
students
with a slightly fewer
students
in
Earlwood
University
with 3000
enrolments
students
and
Smithtown
University
had 2000
students
,
on the other hand
, we can see Indonesia and Colombia had the lowest
enrolments
students
in the three Universities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words smithtown, university, riverview, earlwood, students, enrolments with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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