The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words.

The graph below presents the employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words.
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The employment patterns in the USA between 1930 and 2010 are represented by the graph.
Overall
, it includes 5 industries in the USA, that were active between the certain years. The chart has a linear structure, meaningfully, the dataset is described by multiple lines coloured differently.
Firstly
, the vertical
divided
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into sections by
a
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number of
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labours
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,
whereas
the horizontal part illustrates the years from 1930 to 2010.
Secondly
, the information each colour presents
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below the table.
According to
the data, the "farming, fishing and foresting" section is only the one to have
such
a huge curve from the highest point in 1930 to the lowest in 2010,
however
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other segments stay
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the same point or have only a small
raise
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. Looking closely
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the departments, except "farming, fishing and foresting", the essential
increasing
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of the force was in "technical" between 1960 to 2000. To summarize,
due to
this
infographic, the comparison of each area is fast and comfortable, and
this
is the best solution for the set with the same characteristics.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment patterns
  • industrial sector
  • agricultural sector
  • service sector
  • figures
  • percentages
  • trends
  • decreasing trend
  • increasing trend
  • significant growth
  • considerable decline
  • expansion
  • analyze
  • observations
  • key periods
  • transitions
  • conclusion
  • economy
  • shifted focus
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