The diagram below illustrates the recycling process of discarded glass bottles. Provide a summary of the information by mentioning the main features and make appropriate comparisons wherever relevant.
The diagram illustrates the recycling
process
of discarded glass
bottles
through various stages.
There are six main stages in the recycling process
of glass
, beginning with sorting used glass
and ending with producing clear glass
bottles
.
Initially
, used glass
is collected in a collection box before the process
begins. In the first main stage of glass
bottle production, the used bottles
are segregated by rollers and workers. Then
, they are moved to a machine and broken into small pieces. Following
this
, the glass
is sorted using magnets and other tools.
Next,
the sorted glass
is placed into a cullet melting bowl and melted at a high temperature, turning it into the raw material for new glass
bottles
. After that, the molten glass
is shaped into bottles
that can be used in daily life. Finally
, the bottles
become clear products, and the process
starts again.Submitted by dksrlgus1017 on
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