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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams illustrate how Porth Harbour has changed since 2000.
Overall
, the area has undergone a number of dramatic changes, the most crucial of which are the expansion of piers, the rearrangement of fishing boats and private yacht fields, and the significant development in the south of the map with new and up-to-date amenities for customers. In the northwest, no changes were made to the washrooms and parking lot,
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 the marina site was replaced by a fishing sphere with boats next to it. Moving to the northeast, there was an enlargement of quays for ferries to dock, which was accompanied by two new docks and three ferries for
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. There was a new building for hygienic needs above the
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 lot in the southwest corner of the Porth Habour,
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 the original place of fishing boats was transformed into a private site for yachts. No changes were seen in the position of the lifeboat section, but a new coffee store and shopping complex were built beside it to meet the needs of clients. The road that leads to the lifeboat area branched off to form a new path to the eastern sphere, reaching the hospitality accommodation, which was converted from the old castle. Below the new hotel was a private swimmable area only for hotel customers that was turned from the public beach.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider introducing a brief conclusion summarizing the overall changes, to reinforce the main points of the essay.
logical structure
While the logical structure is strong, ensure that each transformation is clearly and separately discussed to further improve readability.
relevant specific examples
Add more specific examples or details, especially in areas that experienced significant changes, to further enhance clarity and depth.
complete response
The essay effectively summarizes the primary changes in Porth Harbour, offering a clear and complete response to the task.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and body of the essay are well-connected, presenting a cohesive narrative about the developments at the harbour.
supported main points
The use of specific examples, such as the rearrangement of fishing boats and private yacht fields, enriches the essay and supports the main points comprehensively.

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