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Some people believe that schools should choose their student according to their abilities. While other people think students with different abilities should learn together. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays school systems undergo a lot of changes. Many people believe that schools should
devide
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divide
decide
students
in
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into
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 different classes
according to
 their abilities and
skills
while
other
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others
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 argue that it is not correct to make distinctions. In
this
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 I will discuss both visions and give my personal opinion.
To begin
 with, some
students
 have prodigious talents or are more interested in certain subjects.
Thus
 segregating them in a class could benefit their
skills
.
For example
, kids with a particular talent could nurture it and they could be prepared for specific careers,
studying
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 the subjects in more detail.
Furthermore
, selecting
students
 based on abilities could lead to a tailored educational experience.
On the other hand
, mixed-ability classes encourage
leaning
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learning
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 and
childer
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children
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 could learn from each other's
strenghts
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strengths
 and weaknesses. Educating
students
 together promotes equality and can help them earn
skills
 from the gifted ones.
Also
, separating
students
 by ability is
is
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it
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 is not fair. In conclusion, I believe
students
 with different abilities should be able to learn together because it helps them
improving
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 their
skills
.
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coherence cohesion
While the logical structure is generally clear, there are some areas that could be improved. For example, the points could be further developed with more detailed examples and explanations.
task achievement
Ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt. While your essay discusses both views and provides a clear opinion, the response could be deepened with more comprehensive ideas and more relevant examples.
general
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors such as 'leaning' instead of 'learning', 'childer' instead of 'children', and 'strenghts' instead of 'strengths'. These small errors can affect the overall clarity of your writing.
task achievement
The essay successfully discusses both sides of the argument and gives a personal opinion, as required by the task prompt.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which contributes to a well-rounded structure.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tailored education
  • prodigious talent
  • career paths
  • segregating
  • competitive environment
  • inclusive
  • diverse learning environment
  • peer learning
  • irrespective
  • stigma
  • lower ability group
  • balanced approach
  • cater
  • inclusivity
  • diversity
  • respect
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