The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables provide data on goods of Fairtrade, which are labelled
coffee
and bananas in five separate nations between the years 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, it is apparent that the
UK
has benefited the most from
coffee
sales
.
Whereas
Switzerland took the lead in banana
sales
. It is crystal clear that the
UK
started
the
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coffee
sales
with 1.5
million
euros of
coffee
in 1999.
However
, the number skyrocketed to 20
million
within 5
year-period
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year period
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. Whilst Switzerland
figured
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reached
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3
million
in the first year,
although
it had dramatically increased in 2004, by reaching 6
million
. The other three countries,
Denmark
, Belgium, and Sweden showed an upward trend. 0.2
million
rise for
Denmark
as well as
for Sweden and 0.7
million
rise for Belgium, respectively. Turning to the second table, Switzerland in bananas
sale
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sales
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stood first in comparison with the
UK
by presenting 32
million
growth,
while
the
UK
showed 4.5
million
growth. Even though
coffee
sales
illustrated an improvement
by
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all countries,
however
, bananas
sale
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sales
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faced a noticeable reduction in numbers. Particularly, Sweden and
Denmark
demonstrated
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million
drop as well
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as Denmark
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Denmark
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Denmark's
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1.1
million
decline. In spite of Belgium, it shot up to 4
million
from 0.6 
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, uk, sales, million, denmark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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