The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
This
bar chart depicts the origin of foreign
students
(from
India
, Nepal, Vietnam, Indonesia, and Colombia) at three universities (
Smithtown
University
,
University
of Riverview, and
Earlwood
University
) in number of
students
. At
the
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first
sight
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it seems that the
University
of Riverview is the most popular
university
trough all the
students
(with
the
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7500
students
from
India
, and decrease
cradually
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gradually
to 1300
students
from Colombia), and two others are dividing the second place
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on
country
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of origin of their
students
. We can divide those bars into 3 main groups: with the preference
to
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for
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the
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Smithtown
University
(
India
), with the precedency to
the
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Earlwood
University
(Vietnam and Colombia), and two countries - Nepal and Indonesia - with the same number of
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students
in both Universities (
Smithtown
and Eatrlwood).
Moreover
, we can highlight
at
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India
as
a
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the
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country with the
higher
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highest
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number of
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students
, studying
at
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in
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this
area - in total 18500
students
.
In the
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first place for them is the
University
of Riverview with 7500 undergrads, in the
last
place is the
Earlwood
University
with 5000
students
.
Furthermore
,
Colambia
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Colombia
Columbia
is the country with the least amount of
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students
- 3000 in total. The minimal quantity
have
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enrolled
to
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at
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the
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Smithtown
University
- less
then
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than
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1000 undergrads.
To
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In
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the end, it's the similarity of choice between Nepalese and Indonesian
students
- 4000 and 1000 respectively
in
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at
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the
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Smithtown
University
and
the
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apply
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Earlwood
University
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, india, smithtown, university, earlwood with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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