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It is thought by some that is better to live in a city while others believe it is better to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#city #countryside
No one can deny that the
city
 is an important issue. It has both positive and negative aspects. In
this
 essay, I will throw light on the arguments supporting the main views. It's a worldwide fact that living in a
city
 is so important and can play a vital role in our
life
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 as individuals.It can change the shape of
life
. First of all, it has a lot of good effects and advantages which if well-exploited,will change and modify our
life
 completely to the best so we should do our best to develop it by all possible means. In my opinion, it's the golden key to a happy
life
 full of peace and success. If it has any bad effects or disadvantages, they will be of no importance, if outweighed by its marvellous merits and benefits.
Above all
, it helps in the progress and prosperity of any person or nation. I believe that if the government and the individuals put their harvest now or in the near future. In conclusion, living in a
city
more
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is more
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 comfortable than living in the countryside. From my own personal point of
view
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view,
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 a lot of people need more information about living in the
city
 and the countryside. It is better to experience
this
 issue. If we lived in the
city
, we would get information.
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task response
Your essay needs to address both views mentioned in the prompt: one that supports living in the city and another that supports living in the countryside. Make sure to balance your discussion by presenting arguments for both perspectives before giving your opinion.
task response
Include specific examples or scenarios to reinforce your points. This will make your essay more persuasive and credible.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more clearly. Start with a clear introduction that briefly outlines the two views, followed by separate body paragraphs that discuss each view in turn, and finish with a conclusion that reiterates your stance.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas. Words such as 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'However' will make the essay flow more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes the main points discussed in the essay and clearly states your final opinion on the matter.
task response
You have expressed a strong stance on the importance of living in the city.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present.
task response
You have shown a clear intention to discuss both the positive and negative aspects of city living.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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