The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
The line graph represents all the
expenditure
by numbers, describing each Fix the agreement mistake
expenditures
country
annual visitor spend in New Zealand. Starting with Australia, USA, UK, Change noun form
country's
Japan
, and finally
ending with China over a period
of nine years between1996 and 2014.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that during this
nine-year period
, Australia remained the biggest number of annual visitors, with all four other countries spending much less on expenditure
. Whereas
, the smallest expenditure
was by China.
According to
the graph, Australia showed almost 1000 expenditure
in the first year, however
, it changed dramatically until it reached 2500 in 2006. Afterwards, there was a slight drop and at the
end
it illustrated 2100. Add a comma
end,
Whilst
, China started with Correct word choice
apply
least
number exactly 0, but till 2004 it showed a positive trend unless it had dropped to approximately 250 in 2008 and in 2014 it presented around 400.
As the USA Correct word choice
the lowest
expenditure
rate suggest
, USA Change the verb form
suggests
expenditure
showed a noticeable rise 1750
in the seventh-year Change preposition
of 1750
period
. Nevertheless
, it had
decreased to 1400 in Unnecessary verb
apply
four-year
Add an article
a four-year
the four-year
period
. UK’s expenditure
was a little low
than Correct word choice
lower
Japan
, Change noun form
Japan's
however
it only saw a little drop between 1996 and 2002 and between 2008 and 2010 and after Add a comma
however,
UK
even reached Correct article usage
the UK
to
over 1000 which is 500 more in comparison with Change preposition
apply
Japan
. Now turning to Japan
, Japan
had a good start around 500in 1996 but there was more a
downward tendency than an increase. Change preposition
of a
Hence
, it figured around 600 in 2014.Submitted by dnm.best on
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