The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
The line graph represents all the
expenditure
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by numbers, describing each
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annual visitor spend in New Zealand. Starting with Australia, USA, UK,
Japan
, and
finally
ending with China over a
period
of nine years between1996 and 2014.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that during
this
nine-year
period
, Australia remained the biggest number of annual visitors, with all four other countries spending much less on
expenditure
.
Whereas
, the smallest
expenditure
was by China.
According to
the graph, Australia showed almost 1000
expenditure
in the first year,
however
, it changed dramatically until it reached 2500 in 2006. Afterwards, there was a slight drop and
at the
end
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it illustrated 2100.
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, China started with
least
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number exactly 0, but till 2004 it showed a positive trend unless it had dropped to approximately 250 in 2008 and in 2014 it presented around 400. As the USA
expenditure
rate
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, USA
expenditure
showed a noticeable rise
1750
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in the seventh-year
period
.
Nevertheless
, it
had
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decreased to 1400 in
four-year
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period
. UK’s
expenditure
was a little
low
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than
Japan
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,
however
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it only saw a little drop between 1996 and 2002 and between 2008 and 2010 and after
UK
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even reached
to
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over 1000 which is 500 more in comparison with
Japan
. Now turning to
Japan
,
Japan
had a good start around 500in 1996 but there was more
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downward tendency than an increase.
Hence
, it figured around 600 in 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, japan, period with synonyms.
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