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The given two maps illustrates how people access to a city hospital throughout 2007 to 2010.

The given two maps illustrates how people access to a city hospital throughout 2007 to 2010.
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The given two maps
illustrates
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 how people
access
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had access
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 to a city hospital
throughout
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from
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 2007 to 2010. In general, it is clearly observed that the main differences between
3-year
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the 3-year
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 period is the upgrade of the intersection method,
as well as
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 the development of car park areas and bus facilities. From 2007 to 2010, one of the most significant changes was the erection of
the
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a
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 new car park at the East of the city
hospital’
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hospital’s
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 campus for
public
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the public
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,
while
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 the old park was spent only for staff. Those car parks can be accessed by Ring
Road
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.
Furthermore
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, it can be seen that the intersection was upgraded by constructing 2 roundabouts. The first one was built at the four-way intersection of the City
Road
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 and the Hospital
Road
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,
meanwhile
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 the second was located at the three-way junction of the Ring
Road
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 and the Hospital
Road
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.
Last
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 but
no
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not
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 least, 6 bus stops equally divided on Hospital
Road
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was
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were
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 transformed into a bus station, which linked 2 roundabouts.

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