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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
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 the amount of local
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 and
students
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 from different countries entering the University of Australia for ten years.
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, during
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 ten-year period, local
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 remained the biggest admission to the university, with overseas
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other
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 countries
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 much less on them. It is seen that every year more and more people come to Australia, the arrivals from other countries showed rapid and stable growth from 20000 to 80000. In 2007
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regional
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 not budged in the chart for 4 years in 2001
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 number
400000
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 and
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600000. The gap in receipts between
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this
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 two statements had widened and considerably more
students
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 from
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state
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abroad
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. As can be seen from the diagram, the amount of incoming increased in all two graphs but rose stable in ten years the most dramatically
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across
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. The period between 2001 and 2010 saw a sharp growth and in 2007 the Austrians to times more as they did in 2001
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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