The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The given line graphs represent the
statistic
of tourists travelling to a particular Caribbean Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
island
either staying on Use synonyms
a cruise ships
or on Correct the article-noun agreement
a cruise ship
cruise ships
Use synonyms
island
between 2010 and 2017, Add an article
the island
an island
indicated
a million per Wrong verb form
indicating
units
.
Fix the agreement mistake
unit
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that visitors staying on an Linking Words
island
underwent a Use synonyms
fluctuated
trend, Replace the word
fluctuating
whereas
that of those who Linking Words
cruising
experienced an upward trend throughout Wrong verb form
cruised
Correct article usage
the 8-years
8-years
period. Fix the agreement mistake
8-year
However
, it is interesting to note that the average annual travellers who preferred spending time on land was higher than on board except Linking Words
the
Change preposition
for the
last
two years of the compared time frame.
Linking Words
To begin
with, in 2010-2013, Linking Words
at
about 0.8 million Change preposition
apply
peoples
Fix the agreement mistake
people
staying
Wrong verb form
stayed
in
an Change preposition
on
island
which was Use synonyms
the
double that of those who opted for Correct article usage
apply
on
a voyage in 2012. A year later, Change preposition
apply
number
of travellers staying on land remained constant Change the article
a number
the number
while
those who Linking Words
taking
Wrong verb form
took
trip
on board Fix the agreement mistake
trips
slight
rose Change the word
slightly
up
to about 0.5 Change preposition
apply
milion
Correct your spelling
million
peoples
. Interestingly, Fix the agreement mistake
people
in2014
tourists Correct your spelling
in 2014
travelled
around an Wrong verb form
travelling
island
dramatically increased Use synonyms
at
1.5 million Change preposition
to
peoples
, Fix the agreement mistake
people
while
those staying on the sea experienced an unstable rate of Linking Words
visitor
during Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
Linking Words
this
two years.
Correct determiner usage
these
In regards
Change preposition
Regards
with
, Change preposition
to
in
2014-2017, the trends of staying on Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
island
remained constant till 2015 before slightly Add an article
the island
dropped
in 2016 and Wrong verb form
dropping
bounced
back to Wrong verb form
bouncing
same
figure in 2017. Change the article
the same
However
, the popularity of staying on a cruise ship gradually in Linking Words
a
high demand and outnumbered that of those staying Remove the article
apply
in
Change preposition
on
mainland
in 2016 and 2017.Add an article
the mainland
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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