The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The given line graphs represent the
statistic
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of tourists travelling to a particular Caribbean
island
either staying on
a cruise ships
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or on
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between 2010 and 2017,
indicated
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a million per
units
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unit
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.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that visitors staying on an
island
underwent a
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trend,
whereas
that of those who
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experienced an upward trend throughout
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8-years
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period.
However
, it is interesting to note that the average annual travellers who preferred spending time on land was higher than on board except
the
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last
two years of the compared time frame.
To begin
with, in 2010-2013,
at
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about 0.8 million
peoples
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staying
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in
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an
island
which was
the
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double that of those who opted for
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a voyage in 2012. A year later,
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of travellers staying on land remained constant
while
those who
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trip
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on board
slight
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rose
up
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to about 0.5
milion
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million
peoples
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. Interestingly,
in2014
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in 2014
tourists
travelled
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around an
island
dramatically increased
at
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1.5 million
peoples
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people
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,
while
those staying on the sea experienced an unstable rate of
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visitors
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during
this
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two years.
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with
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,
in
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2014-2017, the trends of staying on
island
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remained constant till 2015 before slightly
dropped
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in 2016 and
bounced
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back to
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figure in 2017.
However
, the popularity of staying on a cruise ship gradually in
a
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high demand and outnumbered that of those staying
in
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mainland
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the mainland
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in 2016 and 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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