The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.

The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the

 different increasing.
The line chart gives data about the population in the state of Oregon by country y. Three countries ies that
rised
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rose
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in population from 1940 to 2000. all the data are measured in thousands
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that
the
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Washington has
different
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a different
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pattern and over the period
its
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it
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dramatically increased. On the opposite, the
Yamhill
and the Columbia have the same pattern over the period with a slight change. it can be observed that
tht
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that
Washington is the
most
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country with
high
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the highest
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population growth at 75
thousands
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thousand
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in 1994, nearly to 135
thousand
in 1970 and mostly with 240
thousand
in 2000.
According to
what is shown, the
Yamhill
and the Columbia reached the same point with 30
thounsand
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thousand
in 1940.
in addition
, the
Yamhill
achieved a slight increase with 45
thousand
in 1970
while
the Coulmbia achieved 30
thousand
in 1970.
Moreover
, even in 2000 the
Yamhill
and the Columbia
keep
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the same pattern with small
differnt
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differences
whereas
the former reached 75
thousand
and the latter 60
thousand
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yamhill, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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