Today more countires import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the adventages and disadvantages of this trend. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is argued that, because of
the
globalization, in a large number of nations foods and dishes are Correct article usage
apply
bacome
more and more diverse. For Correct your spelling
become
this
tredency
, Correct your spelling
tendency
bad
thing is that it might be Correct article usage
the bad
threat
to our traditional cuisine market and the good Add an article
a threat
things
is that can drive economic Fix the agreement mistake
thing
developing
.
The Replace the word
development
disadvantages
of Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
food
diversity is can cause discolour Change preposition
of others
others
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other
countries
traditional Change noun form
countries'
country's
food
. In many nations' local restaurants are counts
on residents' Wrong verb form
counted
comsumption
to Correct your spelling
consumption
substain
their income. If their country full Correct your spelling
sustain
with
Change preposition
of imported
import
food
such
as KFC and McDonald these kinds
of Change noun form
McDonald's
food
, people will be go
to Change the verb form
be going
consumes
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consume
for
them because foreign Change preposition
apply
food
might be more attractive. For example
, according to
the study by Cambridge University, through their surveying to
Myanmar citizens Change preposition
apply
are
prefer to eat and consume Unnecessary verb
apply
import
dishes rather than local Replace the word
imported
one
. Correct pronoun usage
ones
However
, i
Change the capitalization
I
also
belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
food
diversity can bring benefits
than Correct quantifier usage
more benefits
drawback
.
For the advantages, Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
import
foods from Wrong verb form
importing
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
countrise
can open our Correct your spelling
countries
countrys'
economy. In the world, the majority of nations are in Change noun form
country's
Correct article usage
a disadvantages
disadvantages
position they can barely Replace the word
disadvantaged
products
enough Replace the word
produce
food
products such
as infants
milk powder, special snacks, and energy drinks which is populations Change the noun form
infant
are
really Unnecessary verb
apply
needs
. Correct subject-verb agreement
need
Thus
, for those countries food
importing are
become Verb problem
has
significant
access to Correct article usage
a significant
obtains
quality Wrong verb form
obtain
food
.
In conclusion, Despite that, open for
the Wrong verb form
opening
import
goods business it
could be Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
a threaten
threaten
to our local market but I still believe that it can accelerate Replace the word
threat
Correct article usage
the countrys'
countrys'
sustainable Change noun form
country's
develop
.Replace the word
development
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Provide more specific examples and explain how these examples support your argument.
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Attempts to address both advantages and disadvantages of importing food, showing a balanced view.
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Endeavors to give examples from studies and surveys, which can be a strong support if used appropriately.
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