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The given charts illustrate the participation of athletes in the Summer and Winter Olympics from 1988 to 2004.

The given charts illustrate the participation of athletes in the Summer and Winter Olympics from 1988 to 2004.
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The given charts illustrate the participation of athletes in the Summer and Winter Olympics from 1988 to 2004. In general,
it is clear that
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 the number of Summer sports players
at the end
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 of the period was the greatest
while
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 that of Winter sports experienced a dramatic decline despite
an
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initial growth.
According to
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 the graph, there were 6
million
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 athletes engaging in the 1998 Winter Olympics,
this
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 figure rose moderately to 8
million
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 in 1992 before nosediving by 5
million
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 in 2000.
Then
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, it witnessed a gradual fall to only 2
million
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 in 2004. As regards the pie chart, the 2004 Olympics recorded the highest number of participants, at 9
million
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.
Whereas
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 the year 2000 and 1988 respectively had the second-highest attendance (7
million
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) and the third (5
million
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). There were significantly fewer competitors in 1996 and 1992, with the former figure being 3
million
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 compared to only 2
million
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 of the latter.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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