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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .
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The graph describes information about the median of Carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person on
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average in four different countries for 40 years from 1967 to 2007. The most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that Italy and Portugal showed an upward trend over the period
while
United
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Kingdom
 and
sweden
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 experienced a downward trend. Another interesting point is that
United
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Kingdom
 had the highest number of carbon dioxide emissions in the first and the end period. Looking at the details, Italy and Portugal did not spend as high as than United
Kingdom
 and Sweden
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these figures stood at 4 and 1 ton respectively.
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Italy and Portugal increased gradually
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every
a
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decade from 6 to 8
tonnes
 (Italy) and from 3 to 5
tonnes
 (Portugal) in 2007.
On the other hand
, Sweden started at 8
tonnes
 in 1967
then
 it rose slightly to 10
tonnes
 in 1997 but
this
 dropped dramatically almost twice to 5
tonnes
 in 2007.
Whereas
,
United
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Kingdom
 spent the biggest CO2 emissions than other countries with
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 number
about
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 10
tonnes
 and
minimal
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a minimal
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about
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 90
tonnes
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