In recent years, more and more people tend to live individually. What are the causes of this trend? Does this have a positive or negative effect on society?

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people
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years. There are personal
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just like to not get into with the community and just to live with few family members and there
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a lot of these
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that have it to have a difficulty's with connecting with the
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I would say it is the most common in recent years because in the
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don't
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because of work and
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why you almost have no
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a negative effect
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society that
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don't connect with each other and it is not good and healthy for
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mood during the day because you don't have
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to chat and live with so
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will make
people
do not give there best on work or even life in general because we are not we are human and humans can not live alone it is a bad thing for your mental health in the
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because
people
have to have fun and free
time
to be fully charged and ready and in a good mode and health and
that is
why it has a very very negative and bad effect on the
people
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