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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in English and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in English and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar diagram compares the proportion of
people
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 living in their personal and rented houses in English and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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 it is immediately apparent that the number of
people
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 who used rental apartments decreased with increasing house
owners
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 with advancing years. 1918 saw the highest
tenants
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number of tenants
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 at approximately 78% whilst 2001 recorded the least home rental at a little over 30%. Notably, there were the same number of
people
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 who rented houses in 1939 as
1953
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 at about 68%. Meanwhile, less than half
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 value was obtained in 1991 at close to 32%. 40% of individuals stayed in rented buildings
in1981
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in 1981
, a figure which is nearly half that for the highest rental
occuring
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occurring
 in 2001. Turning to
people
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 living in their own
homes
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, 2001 had the most occupants being
home
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homeowners
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owners
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 at a little below 70%. Comparatively, more than 60% of
people
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 lived in
the
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apply
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homes
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 in 1991 and 2011 at approximately 68% and 65% respectively.
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, 1918 which had the least house
owners
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 living in their
homes
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 at 22% nearly doubled by 1961 at about 42%. There were the same number of house
owners
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 living in their
homes
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 in 1939 and 1953 at just above 30%.1971 had
equal
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an equal
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 proportion of
people
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 renting as those living in their own houses.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, owners, homes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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