The pictures below show how tea is produced. They also illustrate the process of making a cup of tea. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

This
picture illustrates
process
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the process
a process
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of making
tea
products and making
cup
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a cup
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of
tea
. In general, there are 18 stages of producing
tea
from
sow
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sowing
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tea
seeds to drinking and enjoying. First of
all
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all,
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tea
grows in India and China. Farmers from
this
country sow
tea
seeds and
this
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these
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plants grow
on
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in
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sunshine’s
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sunshines
sunshine
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. After that workers pick
this
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these
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tea
leaves and put them into their baskets
then
this
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these
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tea
leaves are dried by
sun
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the sun
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. In the next
stage
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stage,
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tea
leaves are packed into boxes and loaded onto a truck. And
then
this
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these
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boxes are delivered to supermarkets and customers can buy them and take
away
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them away
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home. Next time the kettle is filled up with water and
boil
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boiled
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.
After
this
stage
tea
bag is put into the cup and
pour
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poured
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hot water,
then
consumers should wait for 2 minutes. Milk and sugar are put into
this
cup with
spoon
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a spoon
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and
finally
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finally,
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they can drink it and
enjoy
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enjoy it
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.
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structure
Consider adding a brief conclusion to round off your essay. It can help improve the structure and give a sense of closure.
cohesion
Try to use transition words and phrases more consistently to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
support
Include more relevant details when describing steps to provide a clearer and more comprehensive response. For example, specify what kind of tea leaves are being picked.
clear ideas
You have outlined the main stages in the process of making tea and preparing a cup of tea clearly, which shows a good understanding of the information.
logical structure
You have logically organized the information, making it easy to follow along with each step.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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