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The pictures below show how tea is produced. They also illustrate the process of making a cup of tea

The picture illustrates the process of producing
tea
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 and at the same time making a
cup
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 of
tea
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. In general, the process starts with growing
tea
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 planet's countries like India and China and ends with drinking enjoyable
tea
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 at home. Most of the
tea
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 plants grow in China and India. In order to have a grown plant farmers first saw the
tea
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 seeds.
Then
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 they get sunshine plants. The fourth step is picking and putting
tea
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 leaves in baskets.
After
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this
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, they dry these leaves. Dried
tea
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 leaves will be packed in boxes.
Then
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 stuff loads boxes onto a lorry and delivered to necessary locations like markets or shopping malls. In markets, customers buy and take the
tea
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 to their homes to make a
cup
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 of
tea
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.At home, they boil water, put the
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 bag into a
cup
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 and pour the boiled water. After two minutes they can add milk or sugar and
finally
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 enjoy with their favourite
tea
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.The pictures below show how
tea
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 is produced. They
also
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 illustrate the process of making a
cup
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 of
tea
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure to maintain a logical flow throughout the essay to improve coherence. Consider breaking down the essay into more distinct paragraphs for different stages of the process. This will make it easier to follow.
task achievement
Avoid minor grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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Add more details to each step of the process to make the response more comprehensive. Ensure each main point is clearly supported with relevant specifics.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a general overview of the tea production and making process, which is a good start.
task achievement
You have covered all the major steps in the process, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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