Recently, many people know a few of their neighbors. What is the cause of the ‎problem? What can be done to solve the problem? Give reasons for your ‎answer and an example from your own experience.‎

In the past
poeple
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people
had been
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in cotact
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cotact
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contact
with their
neighbors
as much as face to face
than
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apply
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currently day,
people
lose
thies
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this
conaction
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contact
. There are many reasons
lead
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that lead
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to that problem and solutions. the first cause,
social
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of social
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media is
altrnative
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alternative
communication.
People
are getting
busy
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more busy
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on it than
visit
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visiting
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their
neighbors
.
At
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You Tube
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YouTube
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,
for example
, there are more families
channal
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channels
which
they
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apply
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recorded
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record
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their daily,
challange
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challenges
or new
trend
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trends
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in media.
Therefore
,
persons
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people
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are
busy
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more busy
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to take
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taking
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photos or
records
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recording
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their daily than
communicate
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communicating
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with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
Second
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reason is
people
spend most of their
time
at
job
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a job
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where they
might
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spend
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12 hours of their day
at
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apply
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working as
ruslt
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well
as
to have
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having
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less
time
to be at home and care about
the
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their
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relationships with
others
.
At
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possible
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a possible
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solution invite our
neighbors
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neighbours
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for
evening
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the evening
an evening
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such
as dinner or
party
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a party
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like
birthday
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a birthday
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or graduation
that
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apply
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will help to keep our relations good and knowing about them.
For example
,
in
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on
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people
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people,
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most
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must
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visit their families and
congadulate
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congratulate
congratulated
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them for
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for
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on
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Eid.
Concequantly
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Consequently
, they
maintan
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maintain
rapport with
others
.
Moreover
,
people
should arrange their
time
for visited
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to visit
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our
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their
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families, friends or
neighbors
in one day every week or two
week
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weeks
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and
assisst
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assist
our children to have
knowladge
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knowledge
about the
significant
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significance
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to be
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of being
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sociality and friendly in their
socity
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society
. In
concludsion
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conclusion
, relationships are
most
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more
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important than occupation and social media to
preseve
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preserve
our sociality
relation
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relations
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with
others
. Occasions and
arrange
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arranged
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time
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times
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will help to contain
contacted
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contact
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with
others
.
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the question appropriately by discussing both the causes and solutions to the problem of people not knowing their neighbors. However, ensure that your main points are clearly stated in the introduction and expanded upon in the body paragraphs with relevant details and specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Avoid grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. Take the time to check your writing for common issues like subject-verb agreement and the proper use of tenses. For example, 'cotact' should be 'contact,' and 'conaction' should be 'connection.'
coherence cohesion
Your ideas should flow logically from one to another. Use transitional phrases to create a smooth reading experience. For example, better transitions can be used between discussing social media and work commitments.
task achievement
You clearly understand the importance of neighborhood relationships and have made a genuine effort to provide solutions. Highlighting social media and job commitments as key causes shows insight into modern life.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This helps organize your thoughts effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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