The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
A glance at the charts provided
highlight
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how the rates
between
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owning three different electrical devices
affect
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the weekly hours that families spent on doing household work in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the most significant change observed is the percentage of all three electrical devices met a considerable rising trend,
while
the time
of spending
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on household work decreased reversely.One of the most significant
change
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is the fraction of vacuum
cleaner
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, it was the lowest
initially
, but it
have
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raised
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up at the top of the rank, sharing first place with the number of
refrigerator
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. To probe more deeply, the rate of owning vacuum
cleaner
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skyrocketed
nearly
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90%, from less than 5% to around 100% from 1920 to 1970, remained at 100%, followed by the rate of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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during the period 1980 to 2019.
In contrast
, in the beginning, the percentage of washing machines was the highest at 40%, but it was kept
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by the percentage of vacuum
cleaner
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and
refrigerator
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,
in
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after 1940 and in 1960 respectively.What
have
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to
particularly
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mentioned,
the
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decline
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trend of the weekly hours that families spent on doing household work dropped nearly 15% every 20 years, from 50% to 20% between 1920 and 1960, and
then
it
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met a stable trend, dropping from 20% to 10% from 1960 to 2019.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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