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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how much proportion of energy was produced in a country between 1983 and 2003. The proportion of oil
production
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 experienced a slight drop in the 20-year period, from 42% to 38%.
However
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, it still took the leading position among these five.
Similarly
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, the data
of
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on
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 coal decreased significantly by 10%, reaching 13%, taking the fourth in 2003. The percentage of Hydropower
production
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 stabilized at 4%, which was the
last
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 since 1983.
By contrast
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, the figures for natural
gas
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 and Nuclear power showed upward trends to 21% and 24%, respectively. The rise of Natural
gas
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production
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 was similar to the decline in coal, helping Natural
gas
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overtook
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 coal as the third.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the percentage of oil and coal
production
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 showed downward trends.
Whereas
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 natural
gas
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 and nuclear power went up, and Hydropower remained stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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