In many countries tiday, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and tv shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

The popularity of
crime related
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crime-related
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novels
as well as
TV shows is
arising
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rising
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day by day. The main reason behind
this
popularity is because these
novels
and TV shows
,
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contain
voilence
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violence
, which attracts
people
's attention.
However
, I firmly believe these
crime
shows and
novels
are wrong
influence
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to influence
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for
general
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the general
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public. 
 Many individuals are so fascinated by
crime
shows because they have intense voilence
such
as murder, tonture, kidnapping, stabbing, which can easily
cought
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caught
people
's
eye
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eyes
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. The
audience
is not used to
watch
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watching
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or
read
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reading
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these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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of stories in their daily life, but in the
crime
serials
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serials,
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individuals are actually watching everything step by step.
Moreover
, these
crime
serials and
novels
are presented in
such
a way that it shows the happening of the murder, first. Afterwards, give some time to
audience
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the audience
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to think,
who
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about who
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is the murderer, just to create a feeling of suspense.
Therefore
, the general public
greatly
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is greatly
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attracted by
crime
shows
dramas
and
novels
. 

Nevertheless
, I strongly feel
the
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that
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dramas
or
novels
, which are based on
crime
has
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have
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a bad influence
for
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on
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the
audience
, especially the younger generation.
Because in
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the normal
world
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world,
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individuals do not encounter these
crime
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criminal
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activities, but by watching
the
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apply
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crime
serials
reading
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and reading
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crime
novels
they
getting
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get
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false knowledge of doing
crime
activities.
For instance
, in India, the show named "Beaware India" used to telecast true
crime
stories
on
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apply
show examples
every weekend.
In addition
,
this
show was on the top during the years of 2015 and 2016. A young girl aged 20 only killed her entire family by adding cyanide
in
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to
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the food. The
surperising
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surprising
teist
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test
this
was when she got caught, she told the police that she got the idea of killing her family from that
paerticular
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particular
show because her family was against her love
marraige
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marriage
.
Thus
, younger
people
are getting easily
infuenced
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influenced
by
crime
dramas
. 
 In conclusion, there is no doubt that
audience
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the audience
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is going to love watching
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violence
voilence
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violence
and suspense in the
crime
shows.
However
, I think these
crime
dramas
and
novels
should be banned in all
nation
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nations
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in order to stop spreading
fasle
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false
knowledge among
people
.
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Work on correcting spelling errors such as 'voilence', 'caught', and 'marraige'. Using correct spelling aids overall readability.
coherence cohesion
Try to use more varied and advanced vocabulary where possible to show a greater range of language use. For example, words such as 'impact' instead of 'influence' and 'depictions' instead of 'stories'.
coherence cohesion
Connect paragraphs more effectively by using linking phrases and words, ensuring smooth transitions and better coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easier to follow and understand the main points discussed.
task achievement
Specific examples, like the one involving the crime show 'Beaware India,' add depth to the argument and support the main points effectively.
task achievement
The essay thoroughly addresses the task questions by discussing both the reasons behind the popularity of crime fiction and TV dramas, and by providing a personal opinion on the genre.

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