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Some people believe that the internet will replace traditional books in the future. Do you believe this would be a positive or a negative development.

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In the era of speed, the internet is invading our lives even the traditional books changed it to ebooks.
This
 development has both positive and native points
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 illustrate in
this
 essay. Some people prefer the traditional book because the
interesting
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of
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 reading being
by
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 its papers ,
smelly
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 of the book. Traditional books
are
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 not needed for a charge , electricity or the internet which enables the reader to take them at any time ,
while
 the e_books as
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other people believing it is more favourable than
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other
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, because
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they
could
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 be saved and kept
them
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digitally in a permanent pattern away from
the
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keeping
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 like heating , humidity, or tearing by reading.
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 they take
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 which are needed for a physical library
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 e_
library
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where
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aren't
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needed to
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supply a
 space for storage.
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conclusion, books are
very
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 significant thing in our life , either traditional or electronic,
hence
 they are needed in All different patterns.
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position on whether this development is positive or negative in the introduction and conclusion. This will make your essay's purpose clearer.
task achievement
Try to develop your ideas more fully and provide more specific examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. This can be achieved by using linking words and phrases.
coherence cohesion
Review grammar and punctuation to avoid fragmented sentences or comma splices, which can impact the clarity of your ideas.
task achievement
You acknowledged both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
You identified specific reasons why some people prefer traditional books and others prefer e-books.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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