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The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the level of
air
pollution
 in five different
countries
. The
countries
 are
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
, New Zealand, Austria, and
Australia
.
Also
, the
air
pollution
 is calculated in
tonnes
.
Overall
,
USA
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the USA
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 is the highest country with
air
pollution
 and New Zealand is the lowest.
FIrst
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First
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 of all,
UK
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the UK
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 got 40
tonnes
.
Then
, there is New
Zealend
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Zealand
 with 30
tonnes
.
Next,
Austria
have
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has
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same
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the same
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 total as
UK
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the UK
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.
Australia
 with 35
tonnes
.
Last
,
USA
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the USA
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 got 80
tonnes
. In more detail, the
countries
such
 as New Zealand and
Australia
 which are part of
Australia
's continent were lower than
countries
 that
located
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are located
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 in Europe and America's continent.
In addition
,
UK
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the UK
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 and Austria are in the middle position. Four out of five are below 50
tonnes
.
UK
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The UK
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 got number two times higher
from
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than
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 other average
countries
. Unfortunately, there is no specific information about the causes of
this
 differentiation. The
USA
 can try to
decreasing
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decrease
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 their
air
pollution
 like other
countries
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, countries, usa, uk, australia, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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