IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
#chorleywood #village #london #population #middle #century #development #report #university #lecturer
The map above depicts the development of
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 countryside. For more detail, Chorleywood is a countryside near London whose population has
stabally
Correct your spelling
stably
stability
 increased
from
Change preposition
since
show examples
 the middle of the nineteenth century. The development of the countryside was from 1868 until 1994.
In addition
, there are two components on the map. The first
one
 is different colors to differentiate the way and the other
one
 is information about the years. The black
colors
Fix the agreement mistake
color
show examples
 is to indicate a main road.
Besides
 that, a white
one
 is shows
motorway
Correct article usage
the motorway
show examples
 which built in 1970.
Last
, a railway that was constructed in 1909 is
symbolyzed
Correct your spelling
symbolized
 with black and white.
Furthermore
, from 1868 and 1883, the village only had
one
 main road.
Then
, between 1883
until
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 1922, the village was added by another main road and
one
 motorway.
Also
, in 1922 and 1970, Chorleywood developed places
were
Correct pronoun usage
that were
show examples
 unknown because there
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
 no
further
 explanation about
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
 on the map.
Lastly
, from 1970 and 1994, a railway was built.
Submitted by wishmeluck  on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words one with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
What to do next:
Look at other essays: