The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of times and doing housework in house holes in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of times and doing housework in house holes in one country between 1920 and 2019
The two line graphs represent the information
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households in a particular country: one compares the percentage of households with
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electrical
applicances
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applications
, another shows
average
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an average
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of
hours
of housework per
weeks
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week
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per household between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that trends of three electrical appliances experienced n upward trend,
whereas
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hours
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housework per week underwent a downward trend
among
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the given time frame.
However
, it is interesting to note that
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refrigerators
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the only appliances that remarkably
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popular and owned in every
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within
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half of the
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century
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.
To begin
with, in 1920, at 40%
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machine was
owned
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the highest among
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two appliances, followed by
vacuum
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the vacuum
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cleaner and refrigerator, at 30% and 2%,respectively. In 1920-1960, both washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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increased
in
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a constant rate
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70%, and 50%, respectively,
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fridges skyrocketed up to 90% in 1960.
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1980 -2019, washing
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machines
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experienced
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fluctated
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fluctuated
trends
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trend
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and ended at 75% in 2019,
whereas
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twos
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gradually reached
its
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their
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peak
to
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100% in 2019. In regards with, in terms of
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of
hours
working on
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housework per week per household, in 1920,
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about 50
hours
per week was the longest time
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for
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and slowly
decreaseto
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decreased
slightly above 10%
at the end
of the
compared
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period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.

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